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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Thu Jan 12, 2012 6:39 am 
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I have an OO on Marie Antoinette that I would like to strengthen as much as possible before the next tournament in a couple of weeks. If anyone would be so kind as to critique it, please PM me and I'll send it to you. Thanks.

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Jan 13, 2012 4:10 am 
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I just finished my Original Interp and I'd love some feedback as well. :) It's essentially an original thematic so I'm hoping to just get some general advice and/or thoughts on how it flows.

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Jan 20, 2012 3:22 am 
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You'd make my life if you read my persuasive. :)

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Jan 20, 2012 5:23 pm 
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If anyone would like to read my persuasive on why freedom is not inherently good, hereit is.

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Jan 20, 2012 8:24 pm 
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So out of curiosity, Justin... you stated that it is not inherently good to be free/to allow people to make their own choices. Do you believe that it would be inherently *bad* to deprive people of their right to make their own choices? If your answer is 'no' and you believe that depriving people of freedom and choice is *not* inherently bad, then what would be wrong with a government like the one in 1984?


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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Jan 20, 2012 8:43 pm 
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If the government ruled justly, then it potentially be okay. However, in an extreme totalitarian state, the likelihood of that happening would be extremely low.

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Jan 20, 2012 9:43 pm 
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Hi everyone!

I'll add my name to the list of people willing to critique any and all speeches. My specialties are Duo and IO, but I'd love to look at anything.

I made it to Nats this past year with an IO, Duo and impromptu, and I competed for five years before they booted me last year and sent me off to college.

Anyway, shoot me a PM if I can help you in any way,

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Sat Jan 21, 2012 3:04 am 
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Hey,
I am an alumni, and I can critique any speech you have for me. :) I've been to Nationals/NITOC in expos, OO, OI, and DI, I was 10th place debate speaker at NITOC last year, and I currently judge and help coach and critique speeches in my former club and from any peeps who need help. Oh and I'm quite good at MLA formatting as well if you need coaching or help with that. :)

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 8:21 pm 
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I'll take some critique on my OP if anyone's willing. I just have to shorten the darned thing.

Thanks

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Thu Mar 15, 2012 4:39 pm 
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Hello all.

I am in desperate need of some cutting for my IO.
If anyone is interested please pm me.

thank you.

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Tue Jun 05, 2012 10:32 pm 
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Yo.
Anyone willing to take a look at my BN in the next 2 days?
Any like....sentence structure critique/Word Choice/structural improvements welcome! :)

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Wed Jun 20, 2012 3:27 am 
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Forerunner wrote:
Yo.
Anyone willing to take a look at my BN in the next 2 days?
Any like....sentence structure critique/Word Choice/structural improvements welcome! :)

Great time to be thinking about changes

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Wed Jun 20, 2012 3:13 pm 
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hehehehe. :D

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Tue Aug 14, 2012 6:55 pm 
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It's not too early for a critique, right??? :? :D

Any comments on this stuff would be great...am I going overboard on the Catholic-ness? ;)

Tell me if you think it's ok, tell me if this would turn you off, tell me if you hate it. Thanks!! Sarah

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My life has been spent in waiting. Longing. Hoping. Praying. I have waited for the One who will set me free. The one who will take the chains from the backs of my people. You tell me that I am a mother. Mother. Mother. That…..my child shall be called “Yeshua.” God Himself. You tell me that I am the Mother….of Adonai, the Lord. The Mother of the Lord. The Lord God. The Mother of God.

(^^ That's the intro....the next stuff is the very end.)

Narr.: Sometimes, it’s dark, and you’re stumbling across life without a dream, without a vision, without a hope….but the moon will be lit up, illuminated….by another. And the moon will guide us through the depths into the morning, to a new day’s dawn, and when you see the sun, it shall be known that moon was nothing on its own, for it has no light, it has no brightness, it has no beauty unless the sun will choose to shine upon it and let it reflect like a perpetual beacon, like a lighthouse, like a star in the night, the star of the blackening seas. And that is why it has been said that, as Jesus represents the Sun, His Mother represents the moon. For she is “A woman clothed with the sun… on her head a crown of twelve stars (Revelation 12:1).” “Her offspring, those who keep God’s commandments and bear witness to Jesus (Revelation 12:17).”
Jesus: “Behold, your Mother (in – text).”

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Wed Aug 15, 2012 11:33 pm 
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Yep, an Original. The last part is supposed to convey a couple things: Mary is our Mother, Mary leads us to Jesus (as the moon leads to the sun), and Mary is "nothing on her own."

If this is the only part that's not pretty much just a crucifixion story, would this affect your vote at all?

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Thu Aug 16, 2012 7:50 pm 
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I really like the prose :) I think the intro is fine as far as Catholicynessness, but you might want to turn tune it down just a little in the conclusion. Obviously do as you wish, it's your speech, but I think it would be more successful if you do that.

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Aug 17, 2012 10:26 pm 
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Thanks for the feedback, both of you!

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Sat Aug 18, 2012 7:50 pm 
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I'm needing some critiques on a Free Trade persuasive. PM me and I'll share it with you on Google Docs, I'm looking for content, rhetoric, and general improvements to be made:)

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Fri Aug 24, 2012 9:24 pm 
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Would anyone be willing to critique my United Nations persuasive???? I am looking for suggestions on how to improve cohesiveness and overall persuasiveness ( right now I feel like I am just ranting on about a whole bunch of random facts :) )
Thanks ahead of time!



EDIT: oh yeah, eventually I'll need someone who wants to read a very depressing Bio on Dylan Klebold, too....

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 Post subject: Re: Speech Critiques
PostPosted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 9:21 pm 
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I'm looking for someone who would be willing to look at my persuasive. It's on the Eucharist. [yes, I am doing this. :)]

I'd specifically like someone who doesn't know a lot about the Catholic view on this is (i.e., you haven't talked to a Catholic about this/aren't Catholic/or whatever else might give you knowledge about this). Organization help would be good, but I do want to make sure that it at least makes sense to a Protestant...as well as whatever questions you might have after reading it.

gratias ago.

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